The previous blog post in the series talks about the structure of ‘give your opinion’ tasks. Don’t forget to check it out if you haven’t already.
What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?
These questions ask you about the aspects of a problem:
- What are the problems created by this and what solutions can you suggest?
- What are the causes of this? What measures can be taken to solve this problem?
Essay Structure
Structure A
Introduction Paragraph
Causes/Problems Paragraph
Solutions Paragraph
Conclusion
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Structure B
Introduction Paragraph
Cause 1 and Solution 1 Paragraph
Cause 2 and Solution 2 Paragraph
Conclusion
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One of the first problems of the internet is the ease with which children can access potentially dangerous sites. For example, pornography sites are easily accessible to them because they can register with a site and claim to be an adult. There is no doubt that this affects their thoughts and development, which is a negative impact for the children and for society. Another major problem is the growth of online fraud and hacking. These days, there are constant news stories about government and company websites that have been hacked, resulting in sensitive information falling into the hands of criminals.
It is important that action is taken to combat these problems. Governments should ensure that adequate legislation and controls are in place that will prevent young people from accessing dangerous sites, such as requiring more than simply confirming that you are an adult to view a site.
Parents also have a part to play. They need to closely monitor the activities of their children and restrict their access to certain sites, which can now be done through various computer programs. Companies must also improve their onsite IT security systems to make fraud and hacking much more difficult by undertaking thorough reviews of their current systems for weaknesses.
To conclude, the internet is an amazing technological innovation that has transformed people’s lives, but not without negative impacts. However, with the right action by individuals, governments and businesses, it can be made a safe place for everyone.
Answer the questions below, then compare your answers to ours.
- Introduction paragraph
- Problems paragraph (two problems are mentioned)
- Solution 1 paragraph
- Solution 2 paragraph
- Conclusion
…there are constant news stories about government and company websites that have been hacked…
This is not the only way to divide up these paragraphs. We could also divide them up into a paragraph of dangerous site solutions and a paragraph of security solutions. Its up to you to decide what you like best, but make sure your decision is logical.
To conclude, the internet is an amazing technological innovation that has transformed people’s lives, but not without negative impacts.
The conclusion could be improved by briefly mentioning what the negative impacts are:
…but not without the negative impacts of exposure to dangerous websites and the stealing of sensitive information.
If you try and structure the paragraphs of your essay and the sentences in your paragraphs as we have suggested here, you are really going to improve your Coherence and Cohesion band score.
Just remember that everything you write must be connected to the question. Ultimately good structure is only half of the game – accurate use of a wide range of vocabulary and grammar is also very important so don’t forget to work on those as well.
We have a more in depth problem/solution essay class here.
Up next is a lesson teaching advantages and disadvantages essay types.
See you next time!
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